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phunky93
April 27, 2017 10:28 pm

because DAMN THOSE RIPPED ABS

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phunky93
April 4, 2017 1:10 pm

calm yo titties LOL , for some reason I think that the baker was straight and the long hair made him look like a girl? I don't know tho. OR he just fell in love LOL ..but those eyes freaky as fuck

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  • Mangaddict
    April 4, 2017 9:26 pm

    I was reading and enjoying it but when I say his eyes I was scared and thought he was gonna do something sadistic to sunhwa ヽ(`Д´)ノ

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phunky93
February 4, 2017 5:29 pm

This is my first BL story. I really love it if you guys could read ch 1 and 2 and tell me whether you love it or hate it , either way is fine , I don't have anyone to ask for their opinions and I don't know if its any good and if there is something I can improve?

https://www.wattpad.com/367844043-a-lovely-and-yet-painful-encounter-chapter-1-~

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  • zephyr4
    February 4, 2017 6:35 pm

    I'll make sure to check it out once I get the time :)

  • Baka~Sama
    February 4, 2017 8:16 pm

    Ill Check it out when i have free time (づ ̄ ³ ̄)づ

  • zephyr4
    February 9, 2017 1:03 am

    I read the first two chapters and it's a really good story (๑•ㅂ•)و✧
    I think I got confused for a sec there cuz were there two girls Maria and Sabrina or just one?? Maybe I'm sleepy lol
    Oh and the part before his father called got me confused as well by I think it's because I'm not that bright
    I liked it an am following it :)

  • phunky93
    February 9, 2017 11:03 am
    I read the first two chapters and it's a really good story (๑•ㅂ•)و✧I think I got confused for a sec there cuz were there two girls Maria and Sabrina or just one?? Maybe I'm sleepy lol Oh and the part... zephyr4

    Oh gosh you are totally right I fixed it , it's supposed to be sabrina I fixed it now omg! and thank you very very much! I'll keep writing and I hope you keep writing feedback on what you like to see, or what you didn't like or did like, and if there is something I need to change , again really thank you (I seriously have a big smile on my face you made my day!)

  • zephyr4
    February 9, 2017 2:14 pm
    Oh gosh you are totally right I fixed it , it's supposed to be sabrina I fixed it now omg! and thank you very very much! I'll keep writing and I hope you keep writing feedback on what you like to see, or what ... phunky93

    Ahaha no probs~ it's just that I haven't had time to read lately (I'm becoming lazier xD)
    Oh, you're doing a wonderful job and if I feel like saying something I'll be in the comments other wise if I don't post anything, rest assured that I liked it very much and am at loss for words :)
    Keep up the hard work and I hope you gets lots of readers who love your works :)
    Have a lovely day (≧∀≦)

phunky93
February 3, 2017 10:47 am

So Im trying to write a BL story and I basically know what the story is going to be

basically uke has a trauma - and seme is rich they both don't trust people with different reasons but seme fell in love with this shy ass uke (even though shy he has a backbone) ..pretty cliche and basic right?

the thing is I have multiple plot lines in my mind of how they meet and how the seme is gonna find out about the uke's past , and how they both suit eachothe. its gonna be slow paced on the smut. usually in manga trauma's are fixed with instant sex which im going to avoid in this case and Im trying to make it realistic as possible (still its gonna be fantasy)

what more should I avoid while writing this story?

hope you BL fans can give me some tips

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  • fiddapo
    February 3, 2017 10:37 am

    the seme being rich are you going to make him a little meanish? or popular...etc cause although that is cliche it is popular. So you could go the other way and make the seme nice. But its your decision. :D

  • phunky93
    February 3, 2017 10:45 am
    the seme being rich are you going to make him a little meanish? or popular...etc cause although that is cliche it is popular. So you could go the other way and make the seme nice. But its your decision. :D fiddapo

    actually while writing this story I wanted him to be a playboy and that it self is a cliche but his inner monologue so to speak is saying " i act like a spoiled rich brat because that's what people expect from someone with a silverspoon people want my status and money " and then upon falling in love he is actually being nice to the uke he does give blunt remarks with being honest but not in a mean way since he is going to be intelligent he can read people (and he is gonna hide that he is rich (that's something I JUST now came up with while replying to you lol , he is however going to be a savage to people who deserve it

  • ............ February 3, 2017 11:55 am

    The stereotype is the weak uke who can't do anything for himself.Don;t make him to helpless.Try to avoid the rape trauma, It's been overused. others to try finding a loved one dead in your home. seeing some one killed being part of any violence ending in death Murder can caues just as mush harm and it would be diff. that's just my OP.

  • Boo_1998
    February 3, 2017 12:07 pm
    actually while writing this story I wanted him to be a playboy and that it self is a cliche but his inner monologue so to speak is saying " i act like a spoiled rich brat because that's what people expect from... phunky93

    i get it, its like those cutesy sweet types that are secretly sadists and only their lover knows. but your doing it opposite. it sounds really interesting, and if he is hiding that he is rich from the one he falls in love with, it sounds great

  • phunky93
    February 3, 2017 1:23 pm
    The stereotype is the weak uke who can't do anything for himself.Don;t make him to helpless.Try to avoid the rape trauma, It's been overused. others to try finding a loved one dead in your home. seeing some one... @............

    Oh yes i do agree that the rape trauma has been overused but I have yet to read a story where rape victims are accurately described , I have personal experience in this area and I wanted to write my thoughts on it , it;s not gonna be " I will overwrite that" thrust thrust grab shlick schlick and BAM healed it's gonna be a long ride (if i make myself motivated to keep on writing)
    i want to either do that or find something else since I want a uke that doesn't like to be touched in certain ways, but my uke does have a back bone he is not helpless he says what is on his mind most of the time aside from the secrets he is hiding (lol at my uke)

  • phunky93
    February 3, 2017 1:26 pm
    i get it, its like those cutesy sweet types that are secretly sadists and only their lover knows. but your doing it opposite. it sounds really interesting, and if he is hiding that he is rich from the one he fa... Boo_1998

    yeah the seme is a sweet type but not overly sweet cute but serious too playful too at times and DAMN I really fell in love with the image in my head
    thanks for your opinion XD

  • Mrs.PotatoHead
    February 3, 2017 1:44 pm

    Are you writing it on sites like wattpad?Because I would love to read that :33

  • Boo_1998
    February 3, 2017 1:58 pm
    Oh yes i do agree that the rape trauma has been overused but I have yet to read a story where rape victims are accurately described , I have personal experience in this area and I wanted to write my thoughts on... phunky93

    you say here that you either want the rape trauma kinda thing or something else, have you thought about an in-between situation? like the uke witnesses his mum or sister being raped when he was young and he tried to fight the guy off and help but being small he just got thrown off or something. and something like that could also account for why he has a backbone kinda. or something.

    but otherwise this sounds like an amazing story, i would love to read the finished product!!

  • phunky93
    February 3, 2017 1:58 pm
    Are you writing it on sites like wattpad?Because I would love to read that :33 Mrs.PotatoHead

    eventually when I have enough content I will post it on wattpad right now my account is empty if you like this is account I made yesterday

    https://www.wattpad.com/user/YaoiFreaky

    Im very new to wattpad (im sooo behind with stuff I didn't know that you can write stuff on there hahaha)

  • Deathscythe
    February 3, 2017 2:09 pm

    Looking forward in reading your work if youd let me! (=・ω・=)

  • Deathscythe
    February 3, 2017 2:13 pm

    How about making the seme oblivious to hardships like hes just cruising life with a silver spoon on his mouth. Its too boring if you make a seme whose perfect in everyway. And the uke would compliment the seme coz uke have experienced everything there is to exp. OMG WHERE CAN I FIND YOUR STORY!

  • phunky93
    February 3, 2017 2:21 pm
    How about making the seme oblivious to hardships like hes just cruising life with a silver spoon on his mouth. Its too boring if you make a seme whose perfect in everyway. And the uke would compliment the seme ... Deathscythe

    oh my that is a good idea actually, instead of a perfect seme i really think that would best i thought i felt something missing because my image made him so perfect thanks!

    it;s gonna take me awhile before i have enough for the first chapter both need to have enough story and , i need to fix my english sentences and make them readable before I post them if youd like to wait by next week Im gonna post the first chapter here

    it's empty now since I literally made this account 13 hours ago hehe
    https://www.wattpad.com/user/YaoiFreaky

  • Deathscythe
    February 3, 2017 2:58 pm
    oh my that is a good idea actually, instead of a perfect seme i really think that would best i thought i felt something missing because my image made him so perfect thanks! it;s gonna take me awhile before i ha... phunky93

    Great! Ill be waiting! And will you be posting it here or in wattpad? Ill download the app if that is so.

  • phunky93
    February 3, 2017 8:26 pm
    Great! Ill be waiting! And will you be posting it here or in wattpad? Ill download the app if that is so. Deathscythe

    I decided I'd post the first chapter I don't know if its any good if you like to read it https://www.wattpad.com/367844043-a-lovely-and-yet-painful-encounter-chapter-1-~

  • phunky93
    February 4, 2017 10:10 am
    you say here that you either want the rape trauma kinda thing or something else, have you thought about an in-between situation? like the uke witnesses his mum or sister being raped when he was young and he tri... Boo_1998

    you know this is actually a good Idea too ! my mind is making all kinda situations right now but sadly I wrote the first chapter and I don't know how im going to fit this situation in but this is a good idea and I like it the uke I wrote is starting off weak but eventually develops a backbone he is a stuttering mess right now and he is going to fix that on his own instead of the regular seme fixing. thank you for your opinion(▰˘◡˘▰)

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hey hey you , this is my first BL story that Im writing would you be so kind and check it out and give me some feedback, if its good or bad , Im just starting out 

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