I did like it but I agree , it is full of incoherences and is a bit too rushed.. I felt like the author had too many ideas and not enough pages so she crammed everything into just 1 chapter and ended up with a bunch of irrelevant events.
the art isn't really bad it's just old style, it even got better in the last chapter.
the 'romance' didn't make much sense and the time skips were too often it made the entire story a bit silly.
the theme , however , is refreshing and it kinda has a plot ( or at least an attempt)
just remember that maybe 10/15 years ago this was a great yaoi because of how different it is from the other stuff , so for someone who didn't read a lot of yaoi , this one might seem great .
To be honest, my main problem with this is that it's a thinly veiled Metal Great Solid doujinshi, and by not really going that route, to me this comes off as a rip-off, and I hate that kind of stuff (especially when I'm a big fan of the original source), and it's honestly annoying and mind-blowing that almost nobody else noticed.
This was great for a laugh though. And ironically if it was actually original, I would have loved it (classic bad yaoi art and storytelling notwithstanding) because I'm a sucker for military themes, especially in yaoi, as it's a big fetish of mine.
The art is generic as hell like 90% of all yaoi manga, AND the story is so melodramatic that the supposed "storyline" feels irrelevant and at times the characters' actions are so random like when """"Steve """"""""Crow"""""" McDaniel"""" raped """"Eric"""" for seemingly no reason and no consequences were shown (typical of most yaoi manga, of course).
I cannot believe I once had the same inferior taste that you all damn underaged yaoi fangirls do right now, I don't see what's so good about this manga, and, obviously, how can I criticise it without commenting on how it blatantly ripped off Metal Gear Solid? Damn, there are so many """""coincidences""""" that I honestly can't take a single panel seriously; this manga is so similar to it that I just had to show it to my boyfriend (a MGS fan) because it makes me laugh with every new bit of information about the damn plot. Seriously, the only redeemable thing about this lame attempt at an original yaoi manga is that it has a military setting and men in military uniforms (and a cute guy in glasses who is a scientist even if he's """""""""inspired""""""""" by another certain young cute scientist in glasses who happens to have "eric" in his own last name), but the classic QUALITY yaoi anatomy kinda... you know, ruins it.
In short, this manga is great to read just for laughs and for my "interests", but the author might have as well made a MGS doujinshi where, instead of destroying Otacon's and Snake's canon relationship and personalities and then using them to make a crappy MGS knockoff, they could have just destroyed their canon relationship and personalities (just like most shippers do).