. . . Meh. The strongest thing about this story is definitely, by far the art. The characters are hot enough, especially Garam when he's all beaten. The dad's tits should've been bigger though.
I just can't really tell how deeply the issues I have are influenced by the poor translation—because the translation's straight shit, like it's just not good, but I've also seen stories that have a really bad translation but you can still tell the base story, the story you're meant to be reading, is good . . . That can't be said for this story. There's just not really much salvageable about it.
For me, the biggest issue I have is the pacing. It's only six chapters. Because of how short it is, I kind of expected something that'd be mainly just smut; Garam would be transported into the dating sim and just spend most of those chapters fucking Taeho. Maybe there'd be like a backdrop of drama, like cheating or having to break up with the game's protagonist or whatever. But instead it kind of felt like the opposite—the drama took center stage while the porn was on the back burner. And for a story of such few chapters, I don't think that's a good idea. At all. You can't do shit with six chapters.
The character of Yena is quite emblematic of all the pacing issues I feel this story has, as she changes moods and goes from one extreme to the other so often that it's almost disorientating.
For example, when Garam is transported into the game, he instantly goes to find Taeho, the father of Yena. Once he finds him he forces himself onto Taeho, and Taeho ends up restraining him and being all reprimanding . . . And then Yena walks in . . . And when he sees her dad holding her shirtless boyfriend down, she flips her shit, accusing her father of trying to steal him away. Like . . . What? Is her father stealing her boyfriends a common thing or something because that's the impression I'm getting from her instantly jumping to such a conclusion. Even with the situation being quite suggestive, what type of person assumes their dad is trying to fuck their boyfriend? It's just so insanely stupid and little idiocies are sprinkled throughout the story.
And then when Garam does break up with Yena, Taeho basically instantly accepts him . . . And it's like . . . You borderline hated him before for toying with your daughter's feelings. Him breaking up with her doesn't change the fact that he still fucked her over, so the father so quickly going from hating him to opening his legs and letting himself get rawed was just kind of insane.
Again, the art was nice though. The characters were really sexy, and it's quite rare to find an older bottom dad character which I always fucking love
I don't like the sexual assault part it's a turn down for me but the end was so cute yena and the other girl side story pls!! Instead of romance this became a cute comedy BYE
the daughter discovered that she's lesbian (or bi atleast). great ending