Mi ghad so this story I read it the first time it realease and it so so fuck up and then I forgot the title but then again atleast good ppl in here help me find it so basically the story is toxic he (the uke) is actually a robot created by of course his manipulative boyfriend I felt really sad and anger after reading this because even though he is a robot he as if became a human as his tears fell on his chin the moment he knew that, thats his final moment what a shame to the seme he treat them like a trash piling up in an abandoned room I think the robot is more humane than his fcking master so hmmp I wanna punch he's face for real
Anytime I read something that's basically just a oneshot, I'm really just expecting shameless smut, so the plot—and it being a good one at that—was really surprising to me.
To be expected with a story so short, I do wish it was longer. It had a really intriguing premise that just wasn't really able to go anywhere and the development that did happen felt incredibly quick and out of left-field. With a story so short, you can't really have even pacing, and the fact that it is so short brought the issue of it front and center.
The story follows Ilya, a man who lives purely for his lover, Henrik; Henrik is a possessive man, controlling everything Ilya does, forcing him to stay in the house they share 24/7. Ilyra is treated as merely a possession he owns.
At night, Ilya is plagued by nightmares. He sees himself in a black void, being told that Henrik doesn't love him and that he's deluding himself into thinking otherwise. He always wakes up with Henrik looming over him.
One day, the house gets a visitor. Henrik tells him to stay in the room and to not come out, but upon hearing an argument, Ilya couldn't help himself. He opens the door slightly and instantly spots the strange visitor. He and the strange man have a brief exchange before Henrik comes back and tells him to leave, but that short exchange changes something in Ilya.
That night, Ilya decides to run away. Henrik tries to stop him but he stabs him in the shoulder and flees. Before going to the front door, he notices Henrik's study is slightly open. He feels himself getting pulled towards it, too curious not to, like a moth to a flame.
And when he opens the door, he sees himself. Multiple versions of himself, all battered and bruised. They're all robotic parts. Before he can make a run for it, Henrik comes up behind him and smashes a hammer against his head.
As he's dying, Ilya finds solace in the fact that in death, it's as himself, and not an object Henrik owns.
That's the whole story. It's pretty good, especially for something that's only two chapters, but there isn't enough breathing room between scenes, and some of the scenes themselves are way too short.
For example, the brief conversation Ilya has with the visitor is a huge turning point. It's what makes Ilya finally stand up for himself and decide to leave Henrik behind . . . But why? When I say it's a brief conversation, I mean it's super fucking brief. I don't think Ilya even says "Hi" to him. All the visitor says is that Henrik isn't a man to accept something as "impossible." Why did that so deeply move Ilya? It makes no sense. If anything, I feel like something like that should have just made Ilya more afraid of the outside world, as that's his seemingly first encounter with anyone other than Henrik. It wasn't exactly a great first impression. Yet it's the turning point for the story, the whole thing hinges on it. Even with it only being two chapters, I thought it was pretty poorly done. You could have just made the visitor allude to Henrik being a bad person.
Another thing is that the plot twist at the end brings up three main questions; one: why? Why is Henrik doing all of this? Is he perhaps trying to immortalize a dead lover, or is he just lonely enough to create one? two: we see multiple versions of Ilya broken and destroyed, but then Henrik says this is the first time he's tried to leave . . . So, what was wrong with the other Ilya's? Three: since Ilya's a robot, what are his early memories? Was he given fake memories of a fake childhood, or is most of his "life" just a mystery to him?
I think this story did good for how short it was, but because it was so short, it couldn't really do much to begin with.
