this isn't about the art. the story is just incredibly bad? why would you take a day off without notifying your boss? and what the hell is that letter supposed to say? genuinely what is the point of uploading this when it's illegible
I know that people are making fun of this and it's expected since the art and writing is different from what we usually see but don't make this stop you from doing what you wanna do. Everyone starts from somewhere and there is a beginning to everything. Keep on practicing, researching other artworks and you'll make a lot of progress. Best of luck!
Ah i think your writing can do some work but its understandable as it looks like your first time making a story Dont let those comment to into your work