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This is basically a mutilated version of a detailed novel plot, that's incredibly obvious. But as soon as they throw the random supernatural/fantasy stuff at you, it just becomes more weird, more lackluster and badly planned. It's just a mess.
They cut so much info out that was important that it's honestly not pleasant to read. Which is the one thing people shouldn't do if they want to adapt a novel or such into a comic. You have to have a sense of what is needed to give as info and what can be
Mild spoilers, skip to last bracket of text to avoid them and get the gist of issues.
The base story is really good, it's much more interesting and pleasant than 90% of the shitty Omegaverse plots we see out there, but at chapter 3 to 4 already things just got WAY too rushed.
Them just getting it on and the villain showing up, making that decision and getting together because suddenly love(?) is a thing, was just way to random, rushed and not well thought out. I mean, he literally went from 'ew
The writing of this feels really off.
I could forgive the very obnoxious back and forth from past to present and rinse and repeat, over and over and OVER (without getting to the point in a good manner), but even that becomes unforgivable since it drags on for so long.
What bothers me most is the absolute misuse of that AND the miscommunication trope tho. As well as the character behavior: Both of them come across like acting to create a specific moment rather than a moment happening due to them
Even the official translation is lackluster in terms of grammar and feels off.
The ML is either mental or just weirdly written; his reason for falling in love was literally him realizing the MC is a mega-idiot/ultra-doormat and then he just kissed him and apparently borderline stalked him.
The MC is not a character, he's a parody-type tool at best; written in a way that furthers the story rather than behaving like a person with a set personality.
The ML's weird, almost creepy obsessive and nonch
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