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This story definitely started with the making of something that could be great. But with each chapter it slowly become more cliche and fell kinda flat for me. I wanted to feel like the characters actually really liked each other, but it felt awkwardly like the author was saying they did but wasn’t showing they did. Honestly most of this story just felt like the top beating people up. Which I like but I wanted him to do more and show more.
This was one of those stories that just fell flat for me. The story started off interesting and the plot around friendship and survivors guilt was really good. With that being said, this story could have done better without the romance. I only say that because the romance between the main characters felt so out of no where. It had no build up, no explanation, just suddenly they both liked each other but even that felt more “saying then showing”. Also the characters felt mostly 2D and
I like a down bad top but I don’t know, this one was a little too stupid for me. Nothing about these characters made me want to root for them either, i just felt no connection to them, so this story falls flat for me.
Cool premise, but rushed and a bit chaotic at times (plot points were mentioned for a second and then no explanation given or not brought up again). Also, suspending disbelief (but most likely done for the plot) that a zombie outbreak was quickly contained in such a small area. The whole time I kept thinking “why do all the characters think the military are coming to save them” or ”do they really believe that the rest of the world outside the university isn’t also in chao
Mostly porn with very little substance to the story and the characters.
December