illveeyours's manga / #bad writing(2)

The story is good but the writing is really bad like it is illogical or doesnt make sense Chapter1 - Alonzo has been trying to get intel from a hard to infiltrate city which seems allergic to giving info to detectives or cops yet he has a lot of chance to get intel with one night stands he's having yet he distances from them? It's just logical to build connections like a salesman to get intel.He said he doesnt give his number duh it's common sense for people who need to have another personality to have a secondary phone Im lmao. He also met Eliseo in a sus situation yet he doesnt ask questions or investigate him? What's he doing there? Just sleeping around? lol Im about to write my orher inputs for chapters 2,3 and 4 but tf it is so obvious already. Good read but written badly. Maybe that's the reason why it was dropped

Im not turned off with the cheating bec that is the plot hello? I think I'm annoyed with the Alpha's inner dialogues it's all so unnecessary and trying to make it as if the Alpha has no choice? This os not realistic tbh. He is clouded hy guilt yet he cant make a decision? It would be more realistic if the student assistant scenes did not happened and he just went straight knowing that the omega is the beta's dad. This is all over the place it is annoying