It is actually a great plot. All you need to do is fix your grammar a bit (if possible), and try to make it deeper. Use contrast of life and death and you can symbolically represent a few things. If you really do want to make an oc with its origins coming from Danganronpa, then I suggest you try using contrast and symbolism. As a writer, I suggest ...... 2 reply
Ok. So I added a few thing and made it sound less repetitive and also fixed a few grammar and punctuation errors. I didn't change a lot because it is your of but please let me know what you think
I was born in July 17. I’m full male but I look like a girl . At first I had pretty normal childhood with my brother Nori, my mom and dad. But on my ...... reply
DANGANRONPA OC’s YES!! I like how you made his motivation for masterminding the killing game very clear :)) but it also really makes me wanna know more about his relationship with the person whose death drove him to utter despair, write more abt that!! Very intriguing and nice overall :)
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