oh my god this is one of the worst yaois i ever read. first of all hes definitely not straight, theres absolutely NO leadup to them having sex, 8 CHAPTERS AND THE SAME DRAMA THAT HAPPENS IN CHAPTER 1 HAPPENS IN CHAPTER 8?????????????? FUUUUCK NO ITS ALL "OMG HES WITH A GIRL HE HATE ME CRYING 1 BILLION" AND THEN "NOOOO BABY GIRL ITS NOT WHAT IT LOOK LIKE IT ONY A FRIEND" over and over and over... and the uke has severe case of <:S the whole time
Passing of story is pretty stumbled but I like it despite that seme is hot as well it's just average storyline i actually like it when uke is insecure but dude is running away every time at least seme is communicating type otherwise it would be a disastrous relationship it shouldn't have end like that i wanted to see more.
yk when you’re like i’m not an expert idk if i can critique this well yeah this one is so annoying that even a non expert can tell the pacing is off and that the characters don’t really grow and that the story is flimsy basically just a catalyst for the r18 scenes….