This was so RUSHED. I didn’t know what the fuck was going on, some parts of this seem like pages were missing because the conversations just skipped around. It was like gaps in pages and in conversations. One moment they’re asking the other about something then the next thing you know were talking about something else without even getting an answer. Conflict felt like it lasted 3 seconds then boom it was solved! This felt so rushed and all over the place at times that I had to go back and re-read pages to make sure I’m understanding what’s happening on the next page. Though this was all over the fucking place, it was cute and the FL was pretty and the ML was cute.
This was so RUSHED. I didn’t know what the fuck was going on, some parts of this seem like pages were missing because the conversations just skipped around. It was like gaps in pages and in conversations. One moment they’re asking the other about something then the next thing you know were talking about something else without even getting an answer. Conflict felt like it lasted 3 seconds then boom it was solved! This felt so rushed and all over the place at times that I had to go back and re-read pages to make sure I’m understanding what’s happening on the next page. Though this was all over the fucking place, it was cute and the FL was pretty and the ML was cute.