This has potential, however, the pacing is all over the place. The plot is beginning to form but not quite. I see where the author is trying to go, but it's hard to follow at times and gives me a headache. Still, I've seen worse so will be reading this to see what happens next. I have a feeling things will improve over time.
This has potential, however, the pacing is all over the place. The plot is beginning to form but not quite. I see where the author is trying to go, but it's hard to follow at times and gives me a headache. Still, I've seen worse so will be reading this to see what happens next. I have a feeling things will improve over time.