I read the comments and changed my mind abot this first paragraph lmao.
Anyway, I hope she doesn’t end up with any of them they are all genuinely awful and do not value your humanity outside of chattle or objectification. There’s also no real progression here, I get that this is Enemies to Lovers but you’re not allowing an avenue that allows each party to be viewed as an equal and that makes it harder for us readers to believe the progression of any relationship here.
It’s so frustrating how she is ultimately trapped in every angle here by people who proclaim they would rather have her dead but then keep her alive. Of course, I understand the politics here and how she can’t do much but narratively we are going in circles with this torture. It doesn’t have to be a revenge fantasy but we need things to pick up.
This can be a problem if the story has no narrative progression and she’s still in this loop of house-hopping while being whipped. At some point, it can become stagnant. Also, I feel like it flattens the characters— everyone here is awful and toxic but it’s not nuanced as one would like and you don’t get every’s pov so you ultimately have to chalk up a lot of their hatred for Just Because. Awful people don’t need a reason to be awful but Awful characters need the story to eventually justify their awfulness in any capacity.
Anyway, interesting story— I heard the father becomes the ML and honestly outside of the Sylvian he’s the best looking to me. I just can’t believe he’s that much of a hoe to sleep with his daughter. Men are so easy and disgusting lol.
I read the comments and changed my mind abot this first paragraph lmao.
Anyway, I hope she doesn’t end up with any of them they are all genuinely awful and do not value your humanity outside of chattle or objectification. There’s also no real progression here, I get that this is Enemies to Lovers but you’re not allowing an avenue that allows each party to be viewed as an equal and that makes it harder for us readers to believe the progression of any relationship here.
It’s so frustrating how she is ultimately trapped in every angle here by people who proclaim they would rather have her dead but then keep her alive. Of course, I understand the politics here and how she can’t do much but narratively we are going in circles with this torture. It doesn’t have to be a revenge fantasy but we need things to pick up.
This can be a problem if the story has no narrative progression and she’s still in this loop of house-hopping while being whipped. At some point, it can become stagnant. Also, I feel like it flattens the characters— everyone here is awful and toxic but it’s not nuanced as one would like and you don’t get every’s pov so you ultimately have to chalk up a lot of their hatred for Just Because. Awful people don’t need a reason to be awful but Awful characters need the story to eventually justify their awfulness in any capacity.
Anyway, interesting story— I heard the father becomes the ML and honestly outside of the Sylvian he’s the best looking to me. I just can’t believe he’s that much of a hoe to sleep with his daughter. Men are so easy and disgusting lol.