man...personally, my biggest gripe w this story is not even how imperfect this relationship is - sometimes, when u have a well written story, the flaws and cracks between a couple can be rly interesting. the thing is...their chemistry is lacking a LOT and their love is not at all believable. nothing about their actions tell me WHY they have any affection for each other as people, they dont even feel like FRIENDS. it just reads as 'well those are my two dolls i made to kiss each other like barbies bc they are the main characters and i said so'. and ok, fair enough, but what about this is going to make me root for them? this story is just an ourobouros made of air, a never ending cycle of a whole bunch of nothing
man...personally, my biggest gripe w this story is not even how imperfect this relationship is - sometimes, when u have a well written story, the flaws and cracks between a couple can be rly interesting. the thing is...their chemistry is lacking a LOT and their love is not at all believable. nothing about their actions tell me WHY they have any affection for each other as people, they dont even feel like FRIENDS. it just reads as 'well those are my two dolls i made to kiss each other like barbies bc they are the main characters and i said so'. and ok, fair enough, but what about this is going to make me root for them? this story is just an ourobouros made of air, a never ending cycle of a whole bunch of nothing