This is such an intricate story. The writing is a bit off, rushed in some places but overall, it's pretty neat. The black-haired dude is clearly co-dependent on the long-haired dude, from what we can make out from his diary. The long-haired dude CLEARLY knows this and was most likely exploiting him for a place to live. It's a new concept, could've been executed in a more detailed manner but this is fire too.
Oh, and, also, the fact that the diary is now embedded into the mind of our MC, making him guilty and forced that he has to help the black-haired dude is perfect. It's a good way to bleed into the mindset that our MC will most likely create an obsession — nonetheless, I absolutely loved this. This was just for me to rant about :D
(And those two characters are pretty similar looking so I can see the confusion!)
This is such an intricate story. The writing is a bit off, rushed in some places but overall, it's pretty neat. The black-haired dude is clearly co-dependent on the long-haired dude, from what we can make out from his diary. The long-haired dude CLEARLY knows this and was most likely exploiting him for a place to live. It's a new concept, could've been executed in a more detailed manner but this is fire too.
Oh, and, also, the fact that the diary is now embedded into the mind of our MC, making him guilty and forced that he has to help the black-haired dude is perfect. It's a good way to bleed into the mindset that our MC will most likely create an obsession — nonetheless, I absolutely loved this. This was just for me to rant about :D
(And those two characters are pretty similar looking so I can see the confusion!)