narration is kinda incoherent and meanders but plotline is actually solid. the reveal that the yakuza guy was a drug addict and into rough sex (but also despises it) due to his past could have been integrated and built up more naturally, bc it felt really abrupt after 3 chapters of a story that just seemed to be about a pianoist unrequited pining away for yakuza in typical toxic yaoi fashion. the amnesia part also felt random... it's not necessarily a bad plot point, but it was really abrupt as well and basically resolved the conflicts and everything easily. that's all to say, if the mangaka revamped this story, while keeping the original themes/characters, i would absolutely read it.
narration is kinda incoherent and meanders but plotline is actually solid. the reveal that the yakuza guy was a drug addict and into rough sex (but also despises it) due to his past could have been integrated and built up more naturally, bc it felt really abrupt after 3 chapters of a story that just seemed to be about a pianoist unrequited pining away for yakuza in typical toxic yaoi fashion. the amnesia part also felt random... it's not necessarily a bad plot point, but it was really abrupt as well and basically resolved the conflicts and everything easily. that's all to say, if the mangaka revamped this story, while keeping the original themes/characters, i would absolutely read it.