do you like non rape or none to least toxic bls?
thought so too LMFAOO
fr HAHAHAHAHA everything about this story is perfection for a short story & here comes a guy blabbing how shallow this is when it was perfectly narrated with a very good plot
What's wrong with you?!!
It's one of my favorite short stories when I read it last. Now the officials are out and I'm supporting the author.
Lmao letting it cook?!? Did you read like three four chapters and go, this did not cook?!?
Sigh.
Children
It left quite an impression with me last I read it. No wonder if felt so familiar when Lezh*n made a drop. It's on sale last day today. The ending was so sad cuz I didn't wanna see them go.
I don't why it rubs me the wrong way when people get upset about someone criticizing a story
I think your opinion is valid
There's a difference when you criticize a story and not being able to comprehend when it is actually good.
Or it just simply didn't speak to you, or whatever it was you expected of the story doesn't make it bad bcz it didn't "live you to whatever you expected of it". OP gave plenty of "I expected ", "I would have preferred this", or "would have gone with this" instead. A LOT of head cannons and ideas not what the story is about. It simply didn't work for them. Doesn't mean the story is bad.
*live up to your hypothetical situation.
The main conflict of the story is about the guy having a mission to help the dragon and falling for the other drick is an interesting conflict. This is a good premise. But the way it was handled is weak and lacking especially when the story's theme centers around correcting wrongs. Like I said, the story suffers by being too short and doesnt provide a more nuanced development. This is a failure in execution and pacing on the side of the author.
Your story can have multiple good points and interesting premises but if you defang a story about a society's issues EVEN IN A FICTIONAL SETTING it cheapens your story because it seems like you just want a cool setting. If anything it just feels like the writer is unable to make every cool thing they thought of matter in the story. Thats writing 101 btw.
You're right. It didn't speak to me. But I didn't say it was completely bad. Just shallow and lacking considering the topics it tried to present. If anything I hope the author gets the chance to make a longer, better paced story because this right here is lacking a lot. Maybe the author will be able to flex what they're capable of. But I've read a lot and sometimes if they're gonna be ambitious, they have to be able to back it up. Author already got some interesting ideas. Would be nice to see fully fleshed out stories while giving the appropriate weight to the topics they present.
Also P.S. to ppl saying if i don't like toxic yaoi. Please this is baby level toxic TwT Toxic yaoi gets their flowers bc they present things as toxic whatever. But if your story attempts to call out the worldbuilding atrocities, well...
idk man im just asking if you like those types cause i wanna recomment this baby levels of no toxic yaoi list of mine
But the story is disappointing and shallow. Probably because of how short it is but lmaoo? They didn't even try to help others or change society? They just went 'oh yeah now let's just run away together.' A bit immature, I wished the author let this cook a bit more. But I've seen writers pull off good story in fewer chapters.
Earlier sex scenes not really worth it for how much it dragged the story. I really wished the author cooked the concept more and made it more meaningful. There's barely a hint of personality and again, probably because of how short this is. The 'heat' thing is just an excuse for the sex and they dont even make it memorable. Author could have leaned into how the heat was the dragon's undoing and gave the characters more conflict to solve. 4/10 read. The 'dragon' 'rut' etc just feels like buzzwords for visibility when they don't have a bearing on the story.