The story is good. I liked the character development of 2nd ML and him getting happy ending. Also its good that I didn't get second male lead syndrome.
BUT!!!!
No matter how happy you are, how can you not consider the son of the emperor? Won't he become like Erne of original story? You killed his dad and Won't he take revenge on you? You wrote a good story with intelligent leads but how can you make such a foolish and selfish ending? You didn't even show him in rhe wedding! There was no scene of Erne talking with him or either ML or FL talking with him. We don't even know if he's alive or not.
How much hurry must you be to end the story that you didn't consider any of this? Such a rushed and unsatisfactory ending. All the good thoughts of while reading the story are all for naught looking at the ending.
The story is good. I liked the character development of 2nd ML and him getting happy ending. Also its good that I didn't get second male lead syndrome.
BUT!!!!
No matter how happy you are, how can you not consider the son of the emperor? Won't he become like Erne of original story? You killed his dad and Won't he take revenge on you? You wrote a good story with intelligent leads but how can you make such a foolish and selfish ending? You didn't even show him in rhe wedding! There was no scene of Erne talking with him or either ML or FL talking with him. We don't even know if he's alive or not.
How much hurry must you be to end the story that you didn't consider any of this? Such a rushed and unsatisfactory ending. All the good thoughts of while reading the story are all for naught looking at the ending.
Whew. I ranted too much.