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REALL im litrally on ch2 and came to check the comments cus this has me irritated alrdy
this!! you're comment is honestly more well written than this shit and you perfectly pointed all the flaws in this story
fuck i used the wrong your*
not judgement here mama
I'm only on chapter three but the writing has me soooo annoyed.
The FL was loved by the gods and while the rest of the world began experiencing famine, she alone has the ability to make whatever land she resides in prosper.
Okay cool cool, nice start. We have a fun little issue presented where we can see how being loved and blessed by the gods can actually just be burdensome in the mortal world
I think marrying her off was stupid as fuck. Whyyyy do that??? She's literally a guarantee of prosperity for your lands. I get that the more powerful kingdoms were becoming threatening out of desperation (it could have become a Helen of Troy situation)
But idk she doesn't have to get married. Bargain to have her visit the different lands or something, but keep her safe until she's grown enough to find a husband and marry properly (...and also keep her to benefit your own kingdom)
But okay whatever. She gets married.
The FUCKING AUDACITY of her mother in law to be like "yeah I know you like saved our kingdom from ruin and famine, but we don't have famine anymore so without a baby, you're kinda just a useless woman who will be cast out if you're husband dies"
And then her sister in law being like "yeah I know you haven't even had you're coming of age ceremony yet, but since you haven't gotten teen pregnant yet, people (me) are gonna start saying you're infertile. You should let your husband sleep with my BFF"
So not only was she sent away as a child, it feels like she was sent somewhere no one likes her or supports her despite being married into this family for over a decade (and ya'know, saving their whole ass country from famine)
I'm sure this story is going somewhere and it probably isn't that bad, but I don't think I'm gonna stick around. It feels like what I just read is saying "If you're a woman, it doesn't matter if you're our kingdom's saviour. You're just a piece of meat with an empty womb."
The exposition is just so poorly written that I can't even suspend my disbelief long enough to reach the plot