honestly I was on board for like 90% of this but wtf is that confession scene, it makes no sense for either character to talk like that.
here, i fix it:
jh: why didn't you tell me that it was all fake?
sj: because.... there was nothing to explain. it wouldn't have made a difference.
jh: what does that even mean?
sj: I'm not a good person.
jh: I don't care. I love you anyway!
sj: I'm allergic to that word. you don't love me, you just think you love me because you don't know me. that wasn't me in that particular video, but I've done stuff like that before.
jh: *agape with horror*
sj: see? I'm unlovable. go back to the hospital.
jh: *trudges back to the hospital sniffling*
sj: *closes the door, sighs deeply* *before morning, realizes he can't live without changbin -- i mean, joohyun* *runs to the hospital, gets into bed with jh, jh wakes up in sj's arms*
jh: sunbae, what are you doing here?
sj: i realized i can't live without you. i can't change my past, but i can change my future. i promise i'll never leave you and i'll protect you from the consequences of my past actions. *lays out his plan to actually do that and hold himself accountable*
idk i just feel like this would've been a better and more in-character exchange for them.
honestly I was on board for like 90% of this but wtf is that confession scene, it makes no sense for either character to talk like that.
here, i fix it:
jh: why didn't you tell me that it was all fake?
sj: because.... there was nothing to explain. it wouldn't have made a difference.
jh: what does that even mean?
sj: I'm not a good person.
jh: I don't care. I love you anyway!
sj: I'm allergic to that word. you don't love me, you just think you love me because you don't know me. that wasn't me in that particular video, but I've done stuff like that before.
jh: *agape with horror*
sj: see? I'm unlovable. go back to the hospital.
jh: *trudges back to the hospital sniffling*
sj: *closes the door, sighs deeply*
*before morning, realizes he can't live without changbin -- i mean, joohyun*
*runs to the hospital, gets into bed with jh, jh wakes up in sj's arms*
jh: sunbae, what are you doing here?
sj: i realized i can't live without you. i can't change my past, but i can change my future. i promise i'll never leave you and i'll protect you from the consequences of my past actions. *lays out his plan to actually do that and hold himself accountable*
idk i just feel like this would've been a better and more in-character exchange for them.