I think story is a bit mediocre. It does not mean I think it's inherently bad, but it's neither a great thing. It feels like this is caused by authors inexperience with writing. They follow certain tropes, but they don't have the indepth understanding of said tropes, so although it looks great on the surface, it feels a bit off to readers. My main problems are fight scenes and also depiction of grief and romance pacing. I'll start from the grief depiction. She was like the mother figure to ml, but we don't really feel that emotional scar her death left on him. It's the first time where he knows he won't see somebody because he couldn't regress at that time, making it difficult probably for him and we can see it, but only in one chapter which I think could be explore more deeply. Even in dungeon when they are talking about her passing it does not feel impactful, it just feels like author knew they had to feel sadness in that moment but didnt know how to write about it. When it comes to fight scenes my main problem is that they feel just off. Again we can see what emotions author tried to depict but it feels like they didnt really knew how to write about them leaving us with battle that seems written correctly but feels a bit off. And when it comes to romance its bie of a nitpick but pacing felt weird especially at the beginning. Overall idont think its bad but its not great too, if autjor is going to keep the same level its just gonna be read and forget. Its def better than some slophwas outthere but u cant call the story great just bc its doing the bare minimum. I think it has potential but writer has to learn how to actually write an emotional scene thats going to resonate with on deeper level with audience. They can do it for romance scenes so it shouldnt be so bad to learn it for fight scenes or more emotional ones like funeral. I think I am going to let this marinate for a while. I had fun reading this but I need a tad bit better quality to keep on reading.
Tldr: its pretty normal but it has potential for the story to become better if writer gains experience.
I think story is a bit mediocre. It does not mean I think it's inherently bad, but it's neither a great thing.
It feels like this is caused by authors inexperience with writing. They follow certain tropes, but they don't have the indepth understanding of said tropes, so although it looks great on the surface, it feels a bit off to readers. My main problems are fight scenes and also depiction of grief and romance pacing.
I'll start from the grief depiction. She was like the mother figure to ml, but we don't really feel that emotional scar her death left on him. It's the first time where he knows he won't see somebody because he couldn't regress at that time, making it difficult probably for him and we can see it, but only in one chapter which I think could be explore more deeply. Even in dungeon when they are talking about her passing it does not feel impactful, it just feels like author knew they had to feel sadness in that moment but didnt know how to write about it.
When it comes to fight scenes my main problem is that they feel just off. Again we can see what emotions author tried to depict but it feels like they didnt really knew how to write about them leaving us with battle that seems written correctly but feels a bit off.
And when it comes to romance its bie of a nitpick but pacing felt weird especially at the beginning.
Overall idont think its bad but its not great too, if autjor is going to keep the same level its just gonna be read and forget. Its def better than some slophwas outthere but u cant call the story great just bc its doing the bare minimum. I think it has potential but writer has to learn how to actually write an emotional scene thats going to resonate with on deeper level with audience. They can do it for romance scenes so it shouldnt be so bad to learn it for fight scenes or more emotional ones like funeral.
I think I am going to let this marinate for a while. I had fun reading this but I need a tad bit better quality to keep on reading.
Tldr: its pretty normal but it has potential for the story to become better if writer gains experience.