Responses
My only complain is that it feels like the MC is carrying the whole comedy aspect of it on his back. He's great, Don't get me wrong. Story plot is also great. But if only the others comitted to the bit as well, it would have been better.
Like in GED, Lloyd's Comedy was fantastic but Javier also contributed. He made it even funnier.
Here, MC's guard, a clear imprint of Javier, Isn't really funny. And i feel like he Isn't really committing to the bit.
If your gonna compare this to that youll ruin your read. Its not the same but there are some relation between the story. Youll ruin the story for yourself if your focused on comparing the two.