I genuinely feel like a smutty fantasy hentai with this plot - a commander/soldier cursed with sexual desires as he slayed a monster (could even be an incubus or succubus if we want to build upon the lore) - could be interesting to explore. Not just the sheer willpower of desire it self, but also oneself. Watching the commander testing out ways to settle his cravings through masturbation and toys were interesting and even quite funny .. Even the visions of the curse could work as a point to drive the plot and what the cost of pleasure evidently proves to be...
But why you have to ruin it with rapeyness T.T it's not even that the Marquis isn't traditionally "yaoi lead handsome" but the fact that the commander clearly has very real distaste for the man. Sure, desire can overpower shyness, embarrassment and in some cases blunt denial (as is seen when the commander thinks to himself that he normally wouldn't do something as filthy as going to wank town on himself) but the smell that he compares to unwashed. The clear panic he feels. And the fact that he very much do not find the Marquis attractive isn't suddenly changed by sheer desire of a good trip to pound town.
I realize that the idea probably (I hope) is to paint the Marquis as the villain and possible the cute blond soldier as the actual Love Interest but still... Considering the effort to show that the "treatment" kinda works too, I find it extremely unnecessary to go to these lengths to show actual rape just #because.
Like... Why not have the Marquis simply explain the whole "no sperm allowed" thing and have him help to find someone that is agreeable to the commander. Could even work as an exploration of the world. There are most likely prostitutes around. The sex toy shop guy probably know all the kink spots and meetups too. What if we were shown the commander search for a way to deal with this like he tried in the beginning, only to slowly come to the realization that he not only needs to be pounded, but that he also very much wants it to happen - possibly from the cute blond soldier that thanked him. I mean... Why the need to go into that detail about how the Marquis is disgusting, smells unwashed and bitter only to completely disregard all of that and let him skullfuck the commander in the next scene.
That's just not how sex with anyone, let alone a newbie, happens. It's not even hot or a case of "in denial" - even though the thoughts kinda attempts to make it seem like the rational mind and the subconscious are fighting. True denial would be something like, "I can accept you use that you but I won't enjoy it" to "this toy is not enough, and I actually want and need more, give me something else that I can and intend to enjoy".
Like the build up is so important here.
Mangakas for erotic stories really ought to begin treating Consent as a very real, physical shield when it comes to sex. Not just curses like here, but also romantic and in the sense of desire. I honestly think it could do much to revolutionise how we perceive consent and desire.
Oh well, I guess I am just sad that this wasn't the groundbreaking story it seemed to be at first. Sadface.
Holy fuck stick.
I genuinely feel like a smutty fantasy hentai with this plot - a commander/soldier cursed with sexual desires as he slayed a monster (could even be an incubus or succubus if we want to build upon the lore) - could be interesting to explore. Not just the sheer willpower of desire it self, but also oneself. Watching the commander testing out ways to settle his cravings through masturbation and toys were interesting and even quite funny ..
Even the visions of the curse could work as a point to drive the plot and what the cost of pleasure evidently proves to be...
But why you have to ruin it with rapeyness T.T it's not even that the Marquis isn't traditionally "yaoi lead handsome" but the fact that the commander clearly has very real distaste for the man. Sure, desire can overpower shyness, embarrassment and in some cases blunt denial (as is seen when the commander thinks to himself that he normally wouldn't do something as filthy as going to wank town on himself) but the smell that he compares to unwashed. The clear panic he feels. And the fact that he very much do not find the Marquis attractive isn't suddenly changed by sheer desire of a good trip to pound town.
I realize that the idea probably (I hope) is to paint the Marquis as the villain and possible the cute blond soldier as the actual Love Interest but still... Considering the effort to show that the "treatment" kinda works too, I find it extremely unnecessary to go to these lengths to show actual rape just #because.
Like... Why not have the Marquis simply explain the whole "no sperm allowed" thing and have him help to find someone that is agreeable to the commander. Could even work as an exploration of the world. There are most likely prostitutes around. The sex toy shop guy probably know all the kink spots and meetups too. What if we were shown the commander search for a way to deal with this like he tried in the beginning, only to slowly come to the realization that he not only needs to be pounded, but that he also very much wants it to happen - possibly from the cute blond soldier that thanked him.
I mean... Why the need to go into that detail about how the Marquis is disgusting, smells unwashed and bitter only to completely disregard all of that and let him skullfuck the commander in the next scene.
That's just not how sex with anyone, let alone a newbie, happens. It's not even hot or a case of "in denial" - even though the thoughts kinda attempts to make it seem like the rational mind and the subconscious are fighting.
True denial would be something like, "I can accept you use that you but I won't enjoy it" to "this toy is not enough, and I actually want and need more, give me something else that I can and intend to enjoy".
Like the build up is so important here.
Mangakas for erotic stories really ought to begin treating Consent as a very real, physical shield when it comes to sex. Not just curses like here, but also romantic and in the sense of desire. I honestly think it could do much to revolutionise how we perceive consent and desire.
Oh well, I guess I am just sad that this wasn't the groundbreaking story it seemed to be at first. Sadface.