Hmmm. The concept is great, and the way the story focuses more on the plot rather than their secondary genders is rather refreshing. But a lot of the dialogue and decisions are too much par for the course. Like, putting the red stone on a box, Yuder's thoughts seems to convey that this is a genius, "How did he think of doing that", decision. But bro, that's just critical thinking at the least? His inner thoughts are way too simplistic for someone who was once a very high ranking commander.
Hmmm. The concept is great, and the way the story focuses more on the plot rather than their secondary genders is rather refreshing. But a lot of the dialogue and decisions are too much par for the course. Like, putting the red stone on a box, Yuder's thoughts seems to convey that this is a genius, "How did he think of doing that", decision. But bro, that's just critical thinking at the least?
His inner thoughts are way too simplistic for someone who was once a very high ranking commander.