Writing a novel because I wanted to like this but it has too many problems I can’t overlook.
Compliments first. I like the art style a lot, it’s very well done. I also love omegaverse in general so that’s another plus. And I enjoyed the setting a lot, the modern royalty setting is something I’ve only seen once before, also omegaverse, and I really loved it more than I expected.
Now on to the problems: the chemistry between the leads seems highly manufactured, we’re supposed to believe that (spoiler) Wookyung imprinted when they were kids but really starts out thinking of Baekwoo as something he should possess? Then he’s way aggressive with Baekwoo, against doctor’s advice too!! He’s too much. None of the side characters matter, despite being introduced and occasionally given some character development.
But above all, I have two very big problems with this. 1) The progression of time feels inconsistent. Take, for example, the days leading up to Baekwoo’s project presentation. They say that he has three days to work on it and the presentation is in a week, but after the project is done, the story acts as though at least an additional week has passed. Another is example is the sex ban after Baekwoo was hospitalized. Doctor said no sex for a week, Wookyung of course was like “four days max” (ugh). Things happen, they explicitly say that those events occur on “the fourth day” implying that they’re four days into their sexless week. Several more days appear to pass, and then they say “it’s been four days!!! We can bang again!!!” Which obviously makes no sense.
However, that issue may all come down to my biggest issue: the translation. I genuinely believe there was no proofreader involved at any point, otherwise the errors make no sense for an official translation. Misspellings, grammatical errors, words that don’t make sense in context, inserted words that look as though they were meant to be deleted, what were likely meant to be idioms translated literally instead of localized for English readers, and probably more things I’m forgetting. I notice even the tiniest of errors and am willing to overlook them when they’re small or few and far between. But this translation is egregious and disappointing. I’m sure translating is an arduous process, but I’m almost certain the translator would’ve caught most of the errors just by rereading their own work. If not, they needed a proofreader. Side note though, the translation actually used “wont to do” correctly, I NEVER see it spelled correctly like that and it made me feel insane after all my issues because this happened in the last few chapters which is nuts.
This has gone on too long. It’s not the worst I’ve read, not even close, but it doesn’t feel special and its issues are the kinds that piss me off, in particular. If you also like this setting and somehow haven’t read it yet, just go read Whispers Through the Willows. I’m gonna give this a 2.75/5, I don’t think it’s good enough for a 3 but not bad enough for a 2.5. Maybe others who can overlook my personal pet peeves will like it more.
Writing a novel because I wanted to like this but it has too many problems I can’t overlook.
Compliments first. I like the art style a lot, it’s very well done. I also love omegaverse in general so that’s another plus. And I enjoyed the setting a lot, the modern royalty setting is something I’ve only seen once before, also omegaverse, and I really loved it more than I expected.
Now on to the problems: the chemistry between the leads seems highly manufactured, we’re supposed to believe that (spoiler) Wookyung imprinted when they were kids but really starts out thinking of Baekwoo as something he should possess? Then he’s way aggressive with Baekwoo, against doctor’s advice too!! He’s too much. None of the side characters matter, despite being introduced and occasionally given some character development.
But above all, I have two very big problems with this. 1) The progression of time feels inconsistent. Take, for example, the days leading up to Baekwoo’s project presentation. They say that he has three days to work on it and the presentation is in a week, but after the project is done, the story acts as though at least an additional week has passed. Another is example is the sex ban after Baekwoo was hospitalized. Doctor said no sex for a week, Wookyung of course was like “four days max” (ugh). Things happen, they explicitly say that those events occur on “the fourth day” implying that they’re four days into their sexless week. Several more days appear to pass, and then they say “it’s been four days!!! We can bang again!!!” Which obviously makes no sense.
However, that issue may all come down to my biggest issue: the translation. I genuinely believe there was no proofreader involved at any point, otherwise the errors make no sense for an official translation. Misspellings, grammatical errors, words that don’t make sense in context, inserted words that look as though they were meant to be deleted, what were likely meant to be idioms translated literally instead of localized for English readers, and probably more things I’m forgetting. I notice even the tiniest of errors and am willing to overlook them when they’re small or few and far between. But this translation is egregious and disappointing. I’m sure translating is an arduous process, but I’m almost certain the translator would’ve caught most of the errors just by rereading their own work. If not, they needed a proofreader. Side note though, the translation actually used “wont to do” correctly, I NEVER see it spelled correctly like that and it made me feel insane after all my issues because this happened in the last few chapters which is nuts.
This has gone on too long. It’s not the worst I’ve read, not even close, but it doesn’t feel special and its issues are the kinds that piss me off, in particular. If you also like this setting and somehow haven’t read it yet, just go read Whispers Through the Willows. I’m gonna give this a 2.75/5, I don’t think it’s good enough for a 3 but not bad enough for a 2.5. Maybe others who can overlook my personal pet peeves will like it more.