this was GOOD! perfect amount of built up & the fallout that makes it so painful that your heart begins to ache.
my only problem is that the entire 3rd act is incredibly fast paced and rushed. it doesn’t compare to the 1st or 2nd act alone. it felt disjointed.
for example. all that built up and she forgives him in a few chapters? she faked her DEATH to get away. the entirety of him getting captured, her killing the cousin.. idk. it felt like they were too “ back on track” right away.
& why have a story with problems such as a miscarriage to have it end in her having children that we never learn the names of. what happens after? how’d we get there? just a tad unsatisfying knowing nothing about the relationship you watched unfold. side stories would help complete this SO much. still worth a read and one of my favorites on this app so far.
this was GOOD! perfect amount of built up & the fallout that makes it so painful that your heart begins to ache.
my only problem is that the entire 3rd act is incredibly fast paced and rushed. it doesn’t compare to the 1st or 2nd act alone. it felt disjointed.
for example. all that built up and she forgives him in a few chapters? she faked her DEATH to get away. the entirety of him getting captured, her killing the cousin.. idk. it felt like they were too “ back on track” right away.
& why have a story with problems such as a miscarriage to have it end in her having children that we never learn the names of. what happens after? how’d we get there? just a tad unsatisfying knowing nothing about the relationship you watched unfold. side stories would help complete this SO much. still worth a read and one of my favorites on this app so far.