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YES OMG the plot and the characters backgrounds would be so good but its not even explained all the way and yohans obsession with jess just doesnt even make that much sense
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YES OMG the plot and the characters backgrounds would be so good but its not even explained all the way and yohans obsession with jess just doesnt even make that much sense
I'm genuinely curious, how are the comments praising this story SO much when it's mostly average?
I honestly thought it'd be something amazing to read only to be met with an admittedly promising and intriguing setting for the plot, pretty art style, BUT mediocre dialogue that feels mechanical and nonsensical half of the time, repetitive events, characters who lack depth despite initially appearing complex and they keep on suddenly acting out of character even mid-conversation like a switch was flipped. And not in some way that adds mystery to them or shows internal conflict, but in a disjointed way.
Last but not least, it's overtly pornified. I love good smut - be it wholesome or toxic - but for a story intending to be plot-centered where you care about characters and developments, the violent/abusive/disturbing sex scenes are literally portrayed like fetish porn and in no way do they evoke any emotion that matches what they're supposed to be depicting. Like, not only the initial dub con, but look at the guard scene and the rape on the train, Jess is saying one thing (being afraid/disgusted or resisting) but the way the scenes are drawn you'd hardly be able to tell this isn't consensual. It's like the story isn't even sure what it wants to be.
Sure, everybody has their preferences and yall might really enjoy the story which is valid, but seeing NOBODY mention all these glaring issues honestly confused me.