The story has so much potential, but it feels like a bunch of things got thrown together without being edited, which is crazy considering how long it takes to make a manhwa.
(Forgive me for the blasphemy, but I really gotta share what I think could've improved the story)
1. Why are the MC's friends so mean to him? They don't even seem like friends. At least make him also able to banter with them. They show his stubborn side later, but show it earlier
2. He just needs one brother. 3 got way confusing
3. Why did he need a _condition_ to want the MC? They're already attracted to each other. It would've been so easy for the MC to watch the ML workout, get hot and bothered and BAM. Or maybe they're watching a romantic movie and BAM. Or they keep accidentally bumping into each other and BAM. Makes way more sense than saying "I lose control" and then making him a consent king.
4. **the biggest change** Why did they give the ML some fictional weird condition? Man's autistic through and through, and if you read it like that, it makes the story more endearing. Every time a character says they have a hard time understanding people, expressing themselves, and prefer rigidity, I always assume the author is writing them as autistic, whether they know it or not
5. The ML doesn't need to be some killer sniper. He could've had a normal accident with the wild boar while still being heroic and getting hurt. Though it would've been better if the ML got the fever and the MC was fine.
Anyway, that's my 2 cents. I can't say anything about the art since I can't draw, but it really was distracting lol
The story has so much potential, but it feels like a bunch of things got thrown together without being edited, which is crazy considering how long it takes to make a manhwa.
(Forgive me for the blasphemy, but I really gotta share what I think could've improved the story)
1. Why are the MC's friends so mean to him? They don't even seem like friends. At least make him also able to banter with them. They show his stubborn side later, but show it earlier
2. He just needs one brother. 3 got way confusing
3. Why did he need a _condition_ to want the MC? They're already attracted to each other. It would've been so easy for the MC to watch the ML workout, get hot and bothered and BAM. Or maybe they're watching a romantic movie and BAM. Or they keep accidentally bumping into each other and BAM. Makes way more sense than saying "I lose control" and then making him a consent king.
4. **the biggest change** Why did they give the ML some fictional weird condition? Man's autistic through and through, and if you read it like that, it makes the story more endearing. Every time a character says they have a hard time understanding people, expressing themselves, and prefer rigidity, I always assume the author is writing them as autistic, whether they know it or not
5. The ML doesn't need to be some killer sniper. He could've had a normal accident with the wild boar while still being heroic and getting hurt. Though it would've been better if the ML got the fever and the MC was fine.
Anyway, that's my 2 cents. I can't say anything about the art since I can't draw, but it really was distracting lol