your translation is not bad at all, there are a couple of grammatical oddities here and there, but that's it, it's perfectly enjoyable, thank you so much for your hard work and good luck with your soon to be proof reader ^^
your translation is not bad at all, there are a couple of grammatical oddities here and there, but that's it, it's perfectly enjoyable, thank you so much for your hard work and good luck with your soon to be proof reader ^^