I'm actually of the opposite opinion. I think that as a one shot the different story aspects they introduced don't connect and would make the story fall apart. But if the story has the chance to continue and brings every thing together... I think this story has some serious potential and I really look forward to see how things develop.
well, that's why I said that it was ok as an one-shot. The manga is trying to say so many things at the same time that its confusing. Its common in one shots, but my problem with this is that it says a lot but it doesn't take the time to explain and develop the characters or the situation. But, I repeat, as an one shot is ok. However, if this is the first chapter of a serialized manga, it sucks. (︶︿︶)
This is just all over the place. I think it tried to make a story but it was so confusing I really couldn't understand it at all. If this is the one-shot its ok, but if all the manga its gonna be like this...just (╯°Д °)╯╧╧