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So I started this because I was curious and...its okay, I guess? It started out somewhat interesting but thay got lost for me pretty fast.
Chapter 4 is completely messed up orderwise.
Everything is happening really fast and the pacing feels completely off. There isn't a real depth to the characters and the mc's don't really get to know each other but are suddenly acting super crummy, even though a moment before she was super insecure and anxious about everything.
There is not much explanation to the world-building or structures, really just the surface of the surface. Also our fl doesn't share much of her backstory with us - also just the surface again as to explain her demeanor. No emotional depth here as well. Its a bummer, because of the lost potential.
Also her randomly acquiring a power - Also with a super short explanation and here being able to use it without actually training or anything and not being mentioned for a while and then suddenly being a thing again seems just like lazy writing to me.
I'll probably continue reading this just to see where its going and if certain story points will continue/be revisited or if they'll end up as lose strings.
Ughhhh I like both Swan and Corey but Corey was always my number 1
In the recent chapters...and the next two coming I couldn't help but thinking that I wouldnt be mad if Swan is endgame...I mean he was always second place for me but sigh...the two of them are great together.
Still love Corey to bits.