Arrested Man
I can no believe this great mangaka came up with a story this aweful.
Shortcut Love!!
Weak as hell. First we have a strong uke and an arrogant seme, then all of a sudden, the uke is weak to pleasure and the confidence of the seme? Not only dose that not make sense but there is also a lack of transitions. Needs improvement.
Shinpu-sama No Kyuuketsuki
It was an overall good story. But the uke was the generic "too emotionally weak to leave the seme." Also, the genre says yaoi but it is actually Shonen ai at best. Finally, though it may seem like the story would be cut short had the uke left the seme or just killed himself, a confident, practiced, and creative writer would be able to make it work and still continue their story.
12-ji Kara Hajimaru
Room for improvement.
Shiri Fechi Nanka ni Sukarete Tamaru ka
This manga was brilliantly thought of and Created. The author and illustrator should be very proud of their work.
Madrigal
This story is not the same as the picture that is shown.
Dakaretai Otoko Ichii Ni Odosarete Imasu.