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I would have probably enjoyed this story better if it either (A) had no romance or (B) the romance is appropriate... by appropriate I meant like probably falling in love with a girl who you didn't meet as a child because the way the romance unfolded here was creepy.
The immortal elf falling in love with a girl as they adventured the world together would have been cute and I probably would have enjoyed the story that way but the creepy factor is that he has a 30 year old human soul inside of that 107 year old elven body!! He has the maturity and age of a developed human man AND he met the girl when she was only a child... she was probably only 14-16 years old that time when he met her... he should have known better. We can't even give the excuse of "oh in elven years he is still just a child" that doesn't make sense because his soul is still that of a thirty year old man
Its a cute short story. Reading stories like these are a good change of pace the story doesn't feel rushed and the timing to end it is just right. The two protagonists also have good chemistry.