beta
Not well paced at all, I do love it bc it's a cute story and generally light hearted but this reads like a self insert fanfiction made by a middle schooler at the exact same time. Russian rullet, you like it or you don't.
Genuinely the only people enjoying this have to be middle schoolers or people with unresolved anger issues. Like im gonna give it a shot and read more but oh my god is this genuinely so bad. It's just a revenge fantasy with poor set up to make you care about the mc, what do we know about him? He got betrayed and his power only works with areas where mana is dense. That's all youre presented with and boom 3 year time skip??? I want to see him actually climb to his power not just boom here you my personal mary sue with a harem to trail behind because why wouldn't the permanent child mc have a bunch of people fawning over him????
Imagine reading something you don’t like and deciding the problem is everyone else’s maturity instead of your taste. Wild.
Trying to let out their emotion and not bringing the same shi to another year maybe? Or anger issue. Lol.