I wrote a whole ass essay talking about how powerful the storytelling is and how realistic the story felt, from the plot to every side character feeling like they have their own egos and lives. But I pressed the back button and everything is gone lol.
Anyways definitely deserves a much higher rating than 8.8, you can tell that the author put a lot of thought into the story. It's the opposite of mass produced regurgitated storylines you commonly see nowadays. Definitely give it a try, and be prepared for tears, if you cry easily don't read this in public HAHA
Every time I check this manga, the rating keeps getting lower. And I think it's because of that fuckass fairy. Readers want to see it suffer but no, she just flying around like a bitch lmao
Story should have ended after the revenge was over. What's the point of adding a love triangle situationship when the ml has already clearly been established? The author probably didnt know what else to write and just threw in a tan hottie with a sprinkle of backstory.
Feels lazy since it raises questions like why hasn't the fl thought about/tried searching for the tan hottie at all even though he seemed important to her, but let's be honest we all know that it's just the product of lazy, impromptu writing. Kinda disappointing coz tan hottie has way more chemistry with fl.
Wow this is bad. Mc is just entirely covered with plot armour, whose only mission is to protect his girls and only troubles is his magician girl/comrades getting in danger. Neither his personality nor his OP abilities are remotely interesting.
Also, 4 chapters in and already 3 women. The magician girl is the peak of characters only added for fan service. From the "mouth to mouth resuscitation" and the stripping of clothes.
And Magician girl keeps collapsing from "intense magical energy emitted" by others or sth, but after collapsing she becomes completely fine with interacting with them afterwards, it is clearly just a show for the author to keep readers reading.
She has been saved by mc 3-4 times already for goodness sake, the epitome of damsel in distress. "One of the strongest magicians" but of course having zero ability to defend herself when mc is around.
Overall plot is not plotting and feels like it's made to be a money grabber by the author. Also needs a harem tag.
I don't think you understand the plot. The main girl is the only female love interest.
There is no harem. The reason why is because:
1. Tiltu (the young ancient dragon girl) is a young girl who is too overpowered and thus is an outcast among her kind. She is too young to understand love and romance in the proper way. (Her being an outcast for a long time didn't help this.)
She's using the marriage excuse to create a connection with him so that she could be loved, cared for and accepted. This is what she really wants. The MC treats her like a clingy little sister that needs comforting.
2. None of the females in rotation (the main people show up in a rotation apparently) have any romantic desires for the MC. He's just treated like a neighbor and friend. Nothing more, nothing less.
3. In order for a manga to gain the harem title, the 3 requirements you need to have are:
A. Romance
B. 3 or more mainstay girls( background or one chapter girls don't count)
C. At least 3 females who have romantic desires for the MC
This manga does not satisfy requirement C and thus is not a harem manga.
4. It takes a while but eventually the MC and the Main girl start having these romance atmosphere moments regularly. He even later has a vision that shows the Main girl holding his future child.
If you're going to say stuff, as least be factually accurate.
Ok I hear you, this might not be an actual harem, but I'm pretty sure it is still a pseudo harem / soft harem. Which is a harem with no romance required. Perhaps not all the females in rotation have romantic feelings for the mc, but it doesn't take away from my point of the writing being shallow.
The young dragon girl using marriage as an excuse to stick to the mc already shows the mentality of the author while writing this. Out of all the possible excuses, the author chose marriage, and they didn't make mc strongly reject or at least be decently taken aback at the remark. He should be sitting her down to teach her boundaries or the correct relationship they should have.
If it really were just an excuse to create a connection, why couldn't the author just make the dragon girl want to be MC's sister? It just screams p*dophillia, or at least the misogynistic notion that these girls should depend on another male in such a manner, and only then can they get the love they deserve.
Same goes for the other girls. They may have their own "problems" and their own "personalities", but if you look deeper and really look at the writing, these girls all exist to orbit around the protagonist, whether they are supporting, depending or validating him for his actions. Their personalities are thinner than paper, and there's only the mildly interesting plot background info that holds these characters up. Just slap a few lines of how this character suffered and we are done, right? My point is this makes them feel decorative and very fanservice-y.
On a technicality I might be wrong, but can you really say that the plot you speak of hold true with the characters' actions? Like the plot is that the magician girl is one of the strongest magicians, but is she acting like one? Can you blame me for calling it a harem with how poorly these female characters are being written? Ive read real harems with better written female characters than this. Was the story so good for you to want to start nitpicking on my usage of the word harem on a story that clearly has some sort of harem going on?
So yeah I'll take back my comment on how there should be a harem tag, but you really had to come
I am loving the story right now. The plot seems to be well thought out and the characters are likable.
However, I can't help but notice that the story seems to be really rushed in some parts and have gaps in others. Like I was totally into the whole 3 majors thing but suddenly mc is in class 5, the worst class? Right after mc is literally praised by every single teacher to be an unprecedented genius? I feel like I missed something there but idrk.
Also regarding the fragments of heros, they foreshadowed that the fragments react when the original hero comes in touch with their fragment. Then after that, Kyle comes along and touches his fragment, causing a huge reaction and sending everyone into the heros world. Excellent story telling, wonderful suspense. But like where is the aftermath? There was literally no mention of the incident after that, even though it was definitely a huge deal. And no suspicions abt why fragment reacted with mc. Not even an explanation on why it shouldn't be a huge deal. Just abrupt ending of the arc.
It feels like I'm being served a 5 star 8 course meal, but midway eating they skip from course 3 to course 5, and yes I'm enjoying the food but I'm also wondering where did course 4 go and will it ever come. Also with this pace, it's like I'm being rushed to gobble up every dish they serve, forced to eat the next course before being able to savour the taste of the previous one.
Will I still eat the full meal though? Absolutely
(Also if anyone can explain to me the class 5 thing plsss tell me I'm dying to know, just in case I actually skipped a chapter/panel or 2 by accident)
No because I'm wondering the same thing!
And it's not just mc... that white haired girlie is sister of the long haired one and was also ranked high right? And she was also put in class 5... why? How? Where's the logic? Id get if it was random but they did say it's the class of students expected to fail so... I'm also utterly confused...
And same about rushing and plotholes... I'm left feeling it's not bad but not good either... cuz it could be executed better...
I also got confused with the class assignments, one moment they were together in Class 5 then suddenly some of them got moved in Class 1 to compete with them.
While the fl's situation really tugs at my heartstrings, the reactions and actions of the people around ml and fl are so fkin funny. I've never before laughed in tears while the tears were from sadness
I went into it fully prepared to not be so disappointed coz it's a oneshot, but damn the story is so good that I alr forgot it was a oneshot when I finished reading it. I clicked on next chapter fully expecting another one and now I'm sad
I know that the "soft top strong bottom" trope has been relatively prevalent in recent years, but really like how this story does the trope. The bottom isn't some tsundere or looks strong but actually is a huge softie, and the top isn't some pushover nor a wolf in sheep's clothing. Not that I have anything against those types of couples but most stories of this trope have at least one of the above traits, and it's really refreshing how it's done here, ESPECIALLY how natural the rls develops and how they fall for each other. They have real chemistry yall~~
The plot towards the end might be morally dubious, but a story doesn't have to be morally righteous to be decent. I like how the father's viewpoint was given "proper" logical justification, and how the ml didn't forgive the father just by hearing his side of the story(since obviously father was in the wrong), but is still willing to interact with father afterwards, whether it was for giving father a chance or for personal growth. It gives us food for thought on whether we could have done better than father in those circumstances, and overall makes the story much more than just smut.
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This is peakkkk