i love the idea of this, but the writing is just kind of…off like where are the details? where’s the world building? where’s the “show dont tell”? it reads like a wattpad story that just wants to get to the good bits asap i just can’t all character monologues just feel the same for everyone, like npc dialogue prompts. things don’t unfold; they just kind of happen, and the characters are just spawn into the scenes.
i love the idea of this, but the writing is just kind of…off like where are the details? where’s the world building? where’s the “show dont tell”? it reads like a wattpad story that just wants to get to the good bits asap i just can’t all character monologues just feel the same for everyone, like npc dialogue prompts. things don’t unfold; they just kind of happen, and the characters are just spawn into the scenes.