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Uhm, I think this is rushed because I can already feel the ending of the chapter.. once again the relationship is rushed, there was chemistry and slowly building up until the whole stuff, like idk there’s something missing yes him being the demon is a nice twist and all but yk after that it was just all the way through rushed.
And I think the only reason he likes her even more is the fact the past they shared, but like even then, it feels forced at the same time.
Then the demon and stuff, stuff really needs to be added because there’s so many plot holes that could be filled in, and as for our main villain, idk I really want a scene where either the fl or ml do end up getting hurt by the villain and it takes a greater depth yk, just something, instead of throwing this and that and boom and poof tada done.
This story is just doomed Yuri in general lowk, she’s got a super obsession and she can’t seem to understand herself, growing up for so many years and not have a single evidence before and then a fake shows up and then the whole thing with Theo was gonna come out but it’s so random, there’s unnecessary drama and it always ends up being swan like yes I get it’s about her and stuff but like idk man, this is just doomed Yuri.