See it has long chapters but it doesn’t matter because somehow half of the chapter is her running in great detail and thinking. it’s just too many panels on one action and repetitive thoughts that the reader already knows. Which I get happens when you're transitioning a ‘novel’ because small things like running from one side of the building to another is explained in greater details to help world building and the mc urgency but it’s unnecessary to add it here where we have the visual. We don’t need a close up of the chandelier, then her mouth, different angles of her mouth, close up of her ankles.. Those parts can easily be cut out to get to the point
See it has long chapters but it doesn’t matter because somehow half of the chapter is her running in great detail and thinking. it’s just too many panels on one action and repetitive thoughts that the reader already knows. Which I get happens when you're transitioning a ‘novel’ because small things like running from one side of the building to another is explained in greater details to help world building and the mc urgency but it’s unnecessary to add it here where we have the visual. We don’t need a close up of the chandelier, then her mouth, different angles of her mouth, close up of her ankles.. Those parts can easily be cut out to get to the point
Never wanted to see a big guy(usually the obvious top)be the bottom so bad as with this one I fear
