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Uh, for the sake of brevity:
Pros:
MC’s plant interest is fairly well handled; it’s not like most of these stories where a hobby/interest/career turns into her entire character
MC’s mom - I like how well her perspective was handled, balancing sympathy and her accepting responsibility for her actions towards her daughter still
The sister attacking the dad - hell yeah fuck’em up; it doesn’t excuse her actions at all, but I feel some pity at least given she was kind of groomed by him? Like yeah, no shit she’s got damage look where it’s coming from
Cons:
Really feels like the story is dragging its feet to her “confrontation” with her family; why have all these sweet moments to build their relationship after arriving in the capital specifically to meet her family?
ML not explaining anything; like wdym “trust me”? Why not just explain it now? You had no problem sufficiently explaining it later. Also why is the ring made with fake gems again? Like was there an actual point to it, or is it him again working AROUND the point of how he loves her “counterfeit” or no
Just general kind of plot beats that don’t really make sense upon scrutiny- ex: why did the dad shower the other daughter with “affection” as an investment but do literally nothing for the other? If you want to sell them off, why so preferential?
All in all, the story isn’t bad, but it’s not stellar either - kind of basic at its best moments
….and this wasn’t all that brief in the end huh