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I think this had more potential but so many things were rushed. The premise of this was very good and as others have said, realistic. But holy shit the pacing was ass. The fl definitely could've had more of a backbone to her, but with daddy issues, it makes sense why she acted the way she did. The ending wasn't bad though. Pleasant surprise although, I wish more time was spent closing up some things. Kinda wasted potential imo.
This was such a laughable story. Idk if it's actually completed as it says or ongoing, but the delivery was very interesting. The premise has a lot of potential, but I fear thed delivery was ass lmao