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ughhh this is so bad for so many reasons i mean mainly it just lacks emotional impact. author doesnt know how to write competent tragic past so she just shoves traumatic shit in and hopes it sticks. The ghost or whatever is such a jerk i wanted to beat his ass. Just zero emotion or care put into this story. 3 or 4/10
the curse drama went on for way to long it started to become annoying ngl. i also wish we saw more from the semes perspective cause that little bit at the end was cute. overall decent 6/10
why tf is this written by m night shyamalan or something damn. this is true meaning of if u had a twin i would still choose you. nd how the fk is the whole family gay. bloodline is done for ong
yooo this was actually hella cute and not corny, fr good. bro said a rapey line that kinda ruined the flow otherwise woulda been goated
all just sweet stories respectful and cute with mild conflict I actually liked them had me cheesin and shit 6.5 or 7/10
you can clearly tell this is written by a woman holy shit these dudes acting like som females for no reason bro. as for the story its mehhh. if you can suspend disbelief that this mid looking dude is some how the sex symbol of the century then maybe youll enjoy it. and somehow its something in his genetics cause his brother receive just as much special attention. Meanwhile the so called average guy is literally more attractive. These two were zero chemistry mfs as well like come on. 4/10 man
first story is an annoying mess but theres some sweet moments of them in ch 4. second couple is pretty great. tbh i say dont even bother w first couple cause its not worth the headache. just go read ch 5
lol raise your hand if you believe in this seme cause it couldnt be me. bro is clearly a fuckboy out all night with his boys. imagine crying crocodile tears while u fuck this dude and he actually believes in it omg what a sucker. first 2 chapters i thot this had goated potential but yeah zen never reemed himself so fail
both stories top tier if they were a bit longer and developed the relationships more both wouldve been goated. yeah overall it was really enjoyable definitely read this
first 2 stories are good especially first story is god tier last story is a little corny and feels unfinished but its short so not that bad
Toumei ni Kuchizuke