To be honest, the plot could have been interesting. The trope "Mafia boss x the poor dude who has to take care of his little brother" is not new, but the dark atmosphere was intringuing. Unfortunately — and I am deeply sorry to say that — the dialogues are a bit painful to read, it's super cliché (that's an understatement) and rushed, the uke is unbearable (the scene next to his little brother is unacceptable and disgusting, like you can not decently decide to write and draw that if you want people to like your character) and "Mr. Risky"... Sorry but no. I've never been against half insane mafia characters — TJ is my lord — but that Risky dude is not hot at all. I just can't take him seriously. The art is quite quirky too, sometimes. It may get better in the futur though.
So yeah, the writing of this story is very risky indeed, but not in the best way. Still, I'd like to know more about the blonde dude. But the beginning of the plot was so rushed... It's gonna be complicated to save the story, or at least give it the coherence it lacks.
To be honest, the plot could have been interesting. The trope "Mafia boss x the poor dude who has to take care of his little brother" is not new, but the dark atmosphere was intringuing. Unfortunately — and I am deeply sorry to say that — the dialogues are a bit painful to read, it's super cliché (that's an understatement) and rushed, the uke is unbearable (the scene next to his little brother is unacceptable and disgusting, like you can not decently decide to write and draw that if you want people to like your character) and "Mr. Risky"... Sorry but no. I've never been against half insane mafia characters — TJ is my lord — but that Risky dude is not hot at all. I just can't take him seriously. The art is quite quirky too, sometimes. It may get better in the futur though.
So yeah, the writing of this story is very risky indeed, but not in the best way. Still, I'd like to know more about the blonde dude. But the beginning of the plot was so rushed... It's gonna be complicated to save the story, or at least give it the coherence it lacks.