So in chapters 8 or 9, he gets kidnapped, and tells her it's because he went to the festival with her brother. He was given a cookie and made him pass out. He then fights for his life for a chapter.
Then, in chapter 11, they go around the festival together. What is the first fucking food she gives him? A fucking COOKIE. B*TCH ARE YOU DUMB??? It's such a minor thing but it took me completely out of the story. I'm not saying he should be traumatized forever or can never have cookies again but the first thing you give him is the exact thing he was dr*gged with??? Make it make sense.
So in chapters 8 or 9, he gets kidnapped, and tells her it's because he went to the festival with her brother. He was given a cookie and made him pass out. He then fights for his life for a chapter.
Then, in chapter 11, they go around the festival together. What is the first fucking food she gives him? A fucking COOKIE. B*TCH ARE YOU DUMB??? It's such a minor thing but it took me completely out of the story. I'm not saying he should be traumatized forever or can never have cookies again but the first thing you give him is the exact thing he was dr*gged with??? Make it make sense.