Fr feels like she's using 'Spin the Wheel' to decide what to do with this story. Each chapter starts abruptly and ends with a cliffhanger and me as a reader is supposed to know what each chapters motives and stakes are?? ┑(￣Д ￣)┍
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Totally agree how unorganized the author is. I also noticed how the author shifted the tone from just serious to serious and humourous, which I found completely jarring and unfitting that I didn't laugh at the humor attempts. I have no idea why she would do that. Maybe to comfort the readers, but there was nothing comforting about Pearly Boy and this sequel in the first place. Also, I thought the author would explore and apply more of the philosophy book Yuta was reading in the beginning, Critique of Pure Reasons, because it was obviously included for a reason. Well obviously, the author has not touched on the philosophy at all since then. Instead, some of us readers theorized and analysed on our own how this could relate to Yuta and be the reason he has changed, which was fun. However, it would be even better for it to evidently play out in the story. Like you said, the author clearly does not know how she wants to run the show. Right now, the author is just throwing a bone here and there, hoping we don't notice. Well, maybe some won't notice if they're ignorant enough.
Just brownie points for the art and how good it is at emotional manipulation. Otherwise, it's just another appalling poorly written sa bl story.
The author is clearly confused and doesn't know what the hell she's doing. She didn't have an outline for this. She just had an idea that she thought would be killer and decided to go with the flow, except it's way too obvious she's been having writer's block from the start (cue the frequent hiatuses and redoing of chapters).
She needs to sit down and think long and hard about what she actually wants for this story.
I'm saying this as an author myself. It's not fair to readers, especially those that are paying with their hard earned money. You've already created complex characters, now give them a direction, a motive, a drive. Just... Something other than random fucking/rape, violence, botched flashbacks and a trip around in circles.
I'm just about tired and ready to drop this. If the next chapter doesn't give a damn good and actually logical explanation for this stunt she pulled, I'm giving up and never reading anything from her again.
Don't even get me started on the glaring disparities in the art, from the disappearing tattoos to bandages and casts that appear and disappear out of nowhere with no explanation even in the flashbacks, the way we can't tell if it's a flashback or the present most of the time and have to figure it out because she obviously doesn't know how to properly transition into the other. The amount of flashbacks in this is already annoying enough, especially when they have no progress in the present.
The way they both have split personalities for whatever reason. I could go on forever.
Honestly, I'm so disappointed. This had so much potential and could have been absolutely awesome if it was actually thought carefully and developed.