Another thing Im really weirded out by, and im def disturbed by this, was how little care eito had at the start abt himself being an omega. Thinking abt it, knowing hes an omega and leo being an alpha, why would he be okay with being alone with the guy in a fucking hotel room? For someone who hid his 2nd gender for so long, why would he even fcking disclose his secondary gender to a guy he barely knows and who dislikes him? Actually, I understand he told the public he was an alpha, but it would have been logical for him to disclose the truth with his manager. Dang, that person would have arranged better set-ups for him? Made sure he was fine with whom he was filming with and def wouldnt have let him be alone with an alpha. Another thing that's bothering me were the rumors abt eito playing around. I assume sexually, because he mentioned during a flashback with natsume that it was coz of the "heats" and that's quite questionable. With how famous he was, there would have bound to be rumors of him being an omega way before the start of his project with leo if he slept around. So, him just getting caught by the paparazzi by the end feels convenient to the plot; not properly foreshadowed by integrating it into the earlier chaps. (Continue)
Oh oh although i love natsume and eito's friendship, another thing that didn't sit right with me was how natsume fcking let leo in the room when eito was in heat. Girl, your friend wasnt thinking straight at that time and you weren't even sure if leo is indeed your friend's fated partner. Without Eito explicitly telling him, when he was rational and clear-headed, that he would have wanted Leo to bite him should he go into heat, Natsume, no matter how good a friend he is, does not have the right to make such life-changing decision. It would have put both parties, whom at that time were in a vulnerable state, in a harmful, irreversible situation.
I think this story has a lot of potential, but it needs to work on things. Although I did enjoy some parts (like how eito addressed leo's insecurity), personally, I think a story becomes lazily written if all it takes is one sxual encounter for the characters to immediately fall in love and throw all the supposed motivations out of the window, especially if this kind of physical intimacy isnt carefully integrated to the overall intent of story and characters' development.
Hmmm...specifically the very first part is too fucking fast-paced. They hated each other then the following page they're having sex. It feels so out of place, and honestly? That took too much from a nice relationship development. As I see it, Leo just "losing control" when they were in the hotel room was out of character, seeing how he takes his priorities seriously and abides by his principles. Heck, that's even the reason why he didn't like eito in the first place: because the latter had rumors abt him being a fuck boy. So, it really doesn't make sense that they had sex right after meeting each other for the very first time. (Continue)