One thing the story struggled with definitely was with the motivation of the main character. It's probably for an impactful plot twist, but the way I saw it, it was none but inconsistent. He was impulsive, sure, but he didn't seem to be naive either. Youd think he would have learned from his last mistake (trying to battle a blue vamp and def not winning), so there's this annoying inconsistency with him that became a barrier in relating to his background story. Another thing to take note of, was how random the little vamp bro fit into the story. He was a ducking plot device. Because the relationship of the couple was too fucked up, the author didn't know where to go from chap three, so their answer was the little bro. Also, the little bro turning out to be the one who killed the adoptive father was ineffective because as i said, it served more as a plot device rather than a motivational urge for the main charac. (Cont.)
It was difficult to piece the story itself, honestly speaking. It tried to get away with this unpolished storyboard with the level of its gruesome and its attempt on romanticizing the meaning of life. So yeah, def could be better
Diving into the story, I knew it was gonna be traumatic, but heck by the second chapter, I was wondering how the characs would develop their relationship with such a short time frame. Given that the blue blood vampire's love language seemed to be trauma giving, I looked forward how it would play out. Wouldnt say I was disappointed per se, because nearing the end, I knew these characs will def not gonna fall in love with each other, hence the ending was a logical route. However! I think the storytelling didn't do justice to the vision of the author. The back and forth revelations of past events didn't really add to the tension, but made the story messily put together. (Cont.)