I get it, I read a lot of dubious things and don’t usually have an issue but maybe bc I’m in a bad mood, I’m more critical of this story rn. I’ve read plenty of the stories where the “I’m going to break you bc I want you to myself” trope is used. Reading smut doesn’t suddenly mean criticism isn’t a thing. The sex was cool, yeah, I guess. They’re hot, yeah. But looking at it in a critical sense of writing, the MC’s character arc was sloppy. How are you raised in a literal mafia house, choose to ignore the obscenities of living in a mafia house, ignore your best friend literally being the heir, and be so fucking helpless and naive? It’d make more sense if he was on the tougher side. Yes, it seems like it was a nicer environment and violence wasn’t prevalent in the home, but you would still have an idea especially with all these rough men around. He literally admits he knew or had an “inkling” but chose to ignore it. Now, one thing that really pissed me off about the ML. The scene with joonhung or whatever scar face’s name is. He enters the home MC is being isolated in and beats him up bc he thinks MC is a detriment to ML (also, author never chose to go in depth with MC’s traumatic past of being locked in a closet??????? Hello????? Is character development in the room with us or not???). ML enters and is angry with MC trying to jump to escape, his first thought is, you’re leaving me waaahhhh, and not WHERE DID THIS BLACK EYE COME FROM??? He got mad when he realized scar face hit him but he couldn’t use critical thinking to explain how his boy toy locked up safely suddenly had a black eye. Make it make sense. Out of everything, that scene was the most infuriating thing to happen out of 65 chapters.
And then bc I found it redundant I just scrolled past all the rape bc why not. It gets old sometimes.
I get it, I read a lot of dubious things and don’t usually have an issue but maybe bc I’m in a bad mood, I’m more critical of this story rn. I’ve read plenty of the stories where the “I’m going to break you bc I want you to myself” trope is used. Reading smut doesn’t suddenly mean criticism isn’t a thing. The sex was cool, yeah, I guess. They’re hot, yeah. But looking at it in a critical sense of writing, the MC’s character arc was sloppy. How are you raised in a literal mafia house, choose to ignore the obscenities of living in a mafia house, ignore your best friend literally being the heir, and be so fucking helpless and naive? It’d make more sense if he was on the tougher side. Yes, it seems like it was a nicer environment and violence wasn’t prevalent in the home, but you would still have an idea especially with all these rough men around. He literally admits he knew or had an “inkling” but chose to ignore it. Now, one thing that really pissed me off about the ML. The scene with joonhung or whatever scar face’s name is. He enters the home MC is being isolated in and beats him up bc he thinks MC is a detriment to ML (also, author never chose to go in depth with MC’s traumatic past of being locked in a closet??????? Hello????? Is character development in the room with us or not???). ML enters and is angry with MC trying to jump to escape, his first thought is, you’re leaving me waaahhhh, and not WHERE DID THIS BLACK EYE COME FROM??? He got mad when he realized scar face hit him but he couldn’t use critical thinking to explain how his boy toy locked up safely suddenly had a black eye. Make it make sense. Out of everything, that scene was the most infuriating thing to happen out of 65 chapters.
And then bc I found it redundant I just scrolled past all the rape bc why not. It gets old sometimes.