Brilliant story. Love the low/mid fantasy setting which is very rare nowadays. Peak, badass, and cunning MC and ML. I appreciate stories that give the MC/uke the power to actively shape the story, rather than passively being controlled by it. The build-up towards romance was organic, and it paid off when they officially confessed
With that out of the way, here are my criticisms. The revenge story was underexplored, which is sad because MC's rage was arguably the heaviest emotional anchor, and it's also the reason why the romance was interesting and not run of the mill. MCs' target died too easily . There's also the problem of tension, it builds towards something, but doesn't quite make it as punchy or interesting. This was emphasized when the story finally came to the point where they no longer knew what happens next, but then everything still happened as planned (arguably a little too quickly too).
NEVERTHELESS, that doesn't make the story bad! It's only because I already love it that I wished it could be more. And as another commenter has said, once you start reading, you can't stop, because you just GOT to see what happens next hahaha.
Brilliant story. Love the low/mid fantasy setting which is very rare nowadays. Peak, badass, and cunning MC and ML. I appreciate stories that give the MC/uke the power to actively shape the story, rather than passively being controlled by it. The build-up towards romance was organic, and it paid off when they officially confessed
With that out of the way, here are my criticisms. The revenge story was underexplored, which is sad because MC's rage was arguably the heaviest emotional anchor, and it's also the reason why the romance was interesting and not run of the mill. MCs' target died too easily . There's also the problem of tension, it builds towards something, but doesn't quite make it as punchy or interesting. This was emphasized when the story finally came to the point where they no longer knew what happens next, but then everything still happened as planned (arguably a little too quickly too).
NEVERTHELESS, that doesn't make the story bad! It's only because I already love it that I wished it could be more. And as another commenter has said, once you start reading, you can't stop, because you just GOT to see what happens next hahaha.