I’ve only read recent chapters like 1012 whatever I tried to give it a try technically I gave it my best try thinking it might get better because it has a really nice promise
But it has a lot of issues, though I can literally count them off the first one being that the main character is doll. He’s extremely doll. He has nothing that won’t to make you read about him or excite you even if you’re reading a fluff or a more soft story the character shouldn’t be this boring. He is straight up boring a character that has zero greed or zero ambition because it doesn’t feel like he has any is not good.
The second being how the characters are portrayed towards him, the interactions feel very like borderline boring the interactions feel like that because the main character is boring. He has nothing that makes you wanna read about him. It’s not like his circumstances are bad so he kinda has to step up a little bit even though he’s a boring character that has no like ambition. There’s so many stories where the character is interesting, even though the genuine story itself is not.
My third biggest problem is that the universe itself isn’t that interesting there is a lot of good that this could’ve had because it’s a good premise. We’ve never gone to like. What about people that just have good stores somebody that’s on our lower rank technically I also hate that he gets handed everything to him without trying at all like I get it’s a fluff story but even in fluffy stories like the writing feels a little bit more cohesive
Also, don’t even hit me started on the writing because it does have a story but the story he is so fucking plain because a lot of the characters I know that I’m complaining about it a lot but because the main character is so plain the story feels really plain because there is so much that is most likely going to be and is being explored, but it feels freaking boring because our character is also kind of dumb even with a dumb or boring character if they just have a little bit of curiosity and it’s shown and written properly, you will be interested. This is written so like overview of the story like the tippy top there’s no wanting to understand there’s no desire for it.
Also, when you have a fluff story, you usually need really good at art. I’m not gonna lie. This art is really subpar. Things are cute but they’re like not that cute. Let’s be for real like they don’t attract to me when you have a story that is more linear soft and is more about its relationships with other characters even if they do have like powers and you see some fights because of them you’re not concentrating on that so you need really pretty art to get this specific amount of the story across.
So overall, I would give this like out of 10 a 2.5 because it has zero effort. It just feels like it has zero effort even though it could be so much more every single chapter. I just feel like it is lacking like there’s something that is supposed to be there like I felt like I read nothing about the plot. I felt like I absorbed nothing.
Even though generally with bad stories, you can clearly see the effort that the author tries to take because first of all they love their work, but for some reason you can’t get that from this, even though it probably was and took effort like this is the second time that I’ve tried to read this like I tried so hard because it feels like it has something the premise is so good but it’s viewed so bad
FYI, this probably has grammatical issues. I am writing this very late at night and I’m very dyslexic and tired sorry.
I’ve only read recent chapters like 1012 whatever I tried to give it a try technically I gave it my best try thinking it might get better because it has a really nice promise
But it has a lot of issues, though I can literally count them off the first one being that the main character is doll. He’s extremely doll. He has nothing that won’t to make you read about him or excite you even if you’re reading a fluff or a more soft story the character shouldn’t be this boring. He is straight up boring a character that has zero greed or zero ambition because it doesn’t feel like he has any is not good.
The second being how the characters are portrayed towards him, the interactions feel very like borderline boring the interactions feel like that because the main character is boring. He has nothing that makes you wanna read about him. It’s not like his circumstances are bad so he kinda has to step up a little bit even though he’s a boring character that has no like ambition. There’s so many stories where the character is interesting, even though the genuine story itself is not.
My third biggest problem is that the universe itself isn’t that interesting there is a lot of good that this could’ve had because it’s a good premise. We’ve never gone to like. What about people that just have good stores somebody that’s on our lower rank technically I also hate that he gets handed everything to him without trying at all like I get it’s a fluff story but even in fluffy stories like the writing feels a little bit more cohesive
Also, don’t even hit me started on the writing because it does have a story but the story he is so fucking plain because a lot of the characters I know that I’m complaining about it a lot but because the main character is so plain the story feels really plain because there is so much that is most likely going to be and is being explored, but it feels freaking boring because our character is also kind of dumb even with a dumb or boring character if they just have a little bit of curiosity and it’s shown and written properly, you will be interested. This is written so like overview of the story like the tippy top there’s no wanting to understand there’s no desire for it.
Also, when you have a fluff story, you usually need really good at art. I’m not gonna lie. This art is really subpar. Things are cute but they’re like not that cute. Let’s be for real like they don’t attract to me when you have a story that is more linear soft and is more about its relationships with other characters even if they do have like powers and you see some fights because of them you’re not concentrating on that so you need really pretty art to get this specific amount of the story across.
So overall, I would give this like out of 10 a 2.5 because it has zero effort. It just feels like it has zero effort even though it could be so much more every single chapter. I just feel like it is lacking like there’s something that is supposed to be there like I felt like I read nothing about the plot. I felt like I absorbed nothing.
Even though generally with bad stories, you can clearly see the effort that the author tries to take because first of all they love their work, but for some reason you can’t get that from this, even though it probably was and took effort like this is the second time that I’ve tried to read this like I tried so hard because it feels like it has something the premise is so good but it’s viewed so bad
FYI, this probably has grammatical issues. I am writing this very late at night and I’m very dyslexic and tired sorry.