The beginning was great. The author messed up the slave arc. They should've spent less time going on abt the annoying second mls unrequited love "if I can't have your body ill take ur heart" vibes and spent more time on MC showing how even without his scholar identity his brains will get him what he wants. He sleeps with second ML to get info abt his mom, random for smut but fine Ill take it as long as it works.
But he never actually finds his mom thru this method even tho he sacrifices his body, even tho this situation lasted years. The 1st ML comes and he finds his mom instantly. So it was useless! There was no point at all besides edging the love triangle, which didn't even exist bc MC had zero romantic feelings for him! There was never even any guessing! Talking bout some "I've engraved myself into ur body and mind" I was expecting more drama from that but MC forgets his years with second ML within 10 seconds of first ML appearance. There was no point to those scenes at all man. Waste of time.
Now, the recovery arc with MC and ML was better bc it showed MC regaining his self worth and also taking actual steps for revenge. It showed growth on MC part and how his years of studying actually paid off. Yet it still wasn't detailed enough for me. Later the separation wasn't detailed enough too. Theyre rather spend time on random amnesia and fake death then spend some pages on MCs rise in status and revenge plan? What's the point of the angst over MC family death( the reason behind him becoming a slave, losing his fam, giving his body to 2nd ML, breaking up with 1st ML, basically the center point of the story) if the author isn't willing to dedicate more pages besides some flashback panels to MC satisfying revenge and showing off his talents and smarts. Even if later the MC thinks he has nothing to live for after the revenge is over, thats AFTER. Since the author has established its importance to MC this whole story, she needs to give it its due weight in screen time. But instead we got amnesia...OK.
Now im not saying she needs to cut the romance. Im saying some useless scenes, 2nd ML slave arc and the 1st ML amnesia arc, should have been cut in favor of MC personal growth. Or at least make these scenes have more meaning aside from romance. Mc slave arc under second ML should have managed to carry out more revenge plans, not just exposing second ML. The amnesia arc should've been addressing MC grief and blame, not just sweet moments and a random dream with his mom to absolve MCs guilt.
If these two things were more elaborated on with the art and story this would have been a 10. Now its like a 7.5 honestly.
The beginning was great. The author messed up the slave arc. They should've spent less time going on abt the annoying second mls unrequited love "if I can't have your body ill take ur heart" vibes and spent more time on MC showing how even without his scholar identity his brains will get him what he wants. He sleeps with second ML to get info abt his mom, random for smut but fine Ill take it as long as it works.
But he never actually finds his mom thru this method even tho he sacrifices his body, even tho this situation lasted years. The 1st ML comes and he finds his mom instantly. So it was useless! There was no point at all besides edging the love triangle, which didn't even exist bc MC had zero romantic feelings for him! There was never even any guessing! Talking bout some "I've engraved myself into ur body and mind" I was expecting more drama from that but MC forgets his years with second ML within 10 seconds of first ML appearance. There was no point to those scenes at all man. Waste of time.
Now, the recovery arc with MC and ML was better bc it showed MC regaining his self worth and also taking actual steps for revenge. It showed growth on MC part and how his years of studying actually paid off. Yet it still wasn't detailed enough for me. Later the separation wasn't detailed enough too. Theyre rather spend time on random amnesia and fake death then spend some pages on MCs rise in status and revenge plan? What's the point of the angst over MC family death( the reason behind him becoming a slave, losing his fam, giving his body to 2nd ML, breaking up with 1st ML, basically the center point of the story) if the author isn't willing to dedicate more pages besides some flashback panels to MC satisfying revenge and showing off his talents and smarts. Even if later the MC thinks he has nothing to live for after the revenge is over, thats AFTER. Since the author has established its importance to MC this whole story, she needs to give it its due weight in screen time. But instead we got amnesia...OK.
Now im not saying she needs to cut the romance. Im saying some useless scenes, 2nd ML slave arc and the 1st ML amnesia arc, should have been cut in favor of MC personal growth. Or at least make these scenes have more meaning aside from romance. Mc slave arc under second ML should have managed to carry out more revenge plans, not just exposing second ML. The amnesia arc should've been addressing MC grief and blame, not just sweet moments and a random dream with his mom to absolve MCs guilt.
If these two things were more elaborated on with the art and story this would have been a 10. Now its like a 7.5 honestly.